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A pale reflection of what you had
in what she takes with someone else.
Yet still all that you can see;
thought that blinds, corrupts your mind.

The light of day, freshly taken away:
as darkness falls across your soul,
and leads your thoughts
where you don't want them to go.

A pale reflection of what you had
repeated eternally in your mind's eye:
always pale but never fading;
forever they're to haunt your soul.

Forced to view sights not your own;
sights you'd never want to see.
Yet compelled to watch,
repeatedly; what feels like eternity.

A pale reflection of what you had!
And only you can see that it is.
Looking on in silence:
favoured view to other's ignorance.

And what you see, as plain as day,
is what you had, slipping away.
From the ashes, something new:
something not involving you.
©2003-2009 ~badblokebob
:iconbadblokebob:

Author's Comments

I write poetry quickly. I'm not one of those people who'll write a first draft, then spend days / weeks / months fiddling with the precise wording, etc. I'm sure this is a perfectly fine way to work, but not for me. It loses any raw emotion that's inherrent in a piece, which with this type of poetry is nigh-on essential, and can lead to it feeling over-worked (because, of course, it has been).

As such, I tend to write poems within half an hour (more often, fifteen or twenty minutes), and that's it. If something takes much longer, it will never be finished (like the five unfinished poems I have at the moment), or if it is will be hard-pushed and not very good. (As for those poems still on the go... if the total actual work time is only fifteen minutes, they still have a chance).

This is one of those rare occasions where I'm posting a poem I've just recently written. It doesn't often happen, and when it does they usually just get added to my stockpile -- aside from those where I've mentioned that I've posted it shortly after writing. I can't deny this is one I'm currently rather proud of... which means that by, at the latest, the middle of next week I'll be embarrassed by it with a passion. But that's just life for me and my work.

Just some brief notes before you read (ironic, that, considering this is probably my longest description ever): firstly, the working title was What I See, but that just didn't seem to suit the poem at all (though perhaps knowing that might lend something to it, if what it lends isn't already obvious); secondly, the use of "they're" in the third stanza is intentional, and is not a basic spelling error of "there" (though the fact it sounds just like it is obviously intended); thirdly, the last stanza rhymes, and the others don't -- this was also intentional; and finally, I realise the title isn't strictly reflected in the mirror in the preview image, but that's besides the point.

I bother to point this out because often people are picked up on things like this in comments, and I want to tell you here and now that it's meant to be like that. Anyone who does point them out will be firmly but politely told to read the bloody descrition.

Thank you for reading. Please enjoy the poem.

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:icontommymalkavian:
thank you especially for pointing this line out in your description "forever they're to haunt your soul"

when I knew it was not a spelling error and was intentional.. it took on a whole new outlook... and it was amazing...

I am not a poetry writer.. but I know what I like.. and I have to say...

well done..

and it sounds like you write poetry like I write prose.. nice to know I am not alone in that... :)
:iconbadblokebob:
Thank you :blush: Glad you like it :)

--
"Quotes relevant to your life are the only ones worth knowing."

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:icontripleeight:
cool.. and sad :(

thought that blinds, corrupts your mind.

:clap:

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RUBEN@DEVIANTART
:icondolphinryder:
There is so much emotion in this that it makes you stop and really feel it.
:iconbadblokebob:
I don't think I've ever stopped a person before :)

--
"Quotes relevant to your life are the only ones worth knowing."

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:iconneverender101:
We are liking muchly.

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# Guess it's too bad - everything we have - is taken away #
:iconbadblokebob:
Good good :thumbsup:

--
"Quotes relevant to your life are the only ones worth knowing."

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:icondolphinryder:
There's always time for something new. :) You have a wonderful talent, it amazes me every time I read one of your pieces.
:iconjustkristy:
Richard... i mean it when i say that this is probaly the best poem i've ever read by you. i'm thoroughly impressed.

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TheOneAndOnly
:skullbones:*kristy*

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